Monday, May 22, 2017

Close to midnight

soon 
it’s midnight… 
silence
sound of nought
but crawl of claws
on gravel 
     footsteps
muted   far    away

laboured breath
from rotting jaws

heartbeats racing
   twisted bedsheets
wet with sweat
    when
suddenly 
    a clock
strikes      twelve

and moonbeamed
from my throat 
         erupt 

howls for blood

Linked to dVerse Quadrille with Victoria

14 comments:

  1. So much sound in this that plays together to create a dark, chilling fantasy. Nice.

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  2. "sound of nought
    but crawl of claws" ... This is my favorite part.

    I also like how the spacing suggests that the "clock" might represent someone who is striking 12 people.

    I also like these:

    "twisted bedsheets
    wet with sweat"

    "moonbeamed
    from my throat" ... Also how the word-stacking makes it sound like you're vomiting blood.

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  3. brilliant.....you got your teeth into this prompt ;)

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  4. Give me a big smile, this one did.

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  5. So much for the thought that, "tender is the night." Your poem dispels that nicely.

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  6. Dramatic play of bloody howls Bjorn ~ Crawl of claws is creepy ~

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  7. I don't know why, but the werewolf sounds like he's coming in for the night.

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  8. I felt a couple of different things going on here, but mostly a mysterious transformation. There is the implication that there is more than one at play here ;)

    heartbeats racing
    twisted bedsheets
    wet with sweat
    when…
    suddenly
    a clock
    strikes twelve

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  9. Brilliant werewolf Quadrille, Bjorn. I love the lines:
    'sound of nought
    but crawl of claws'
    'and moonbeamed
    from my throat
    erupt

    howls for blood'.
    Nice twist - reminds me of Thriller!

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  10. Oh my gosh! Okay --- you've definitely gone to the dark side with this one! It strikes me after reading comments on my Final Scene...that when I wrote Vamp sounds of decay....folks may have seen the double entendre within the word "vamp" and thought I meant a vampire....which your words definitely invoke! When actually I meant as in a movie direction: vamp up the sounds...make them louder :) Ah well....you've definitely given us a thriller here with a vampire twisted in the sheets!!!

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  11. Whew. Man, I can HEAR this:
    "crawl of claws
    on gravel"

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  12. My affinity for paranormal novels takes over here and I imagine all kinds of bloodthirsty events.
    Love the sound of the words. As others have said "crawl of claws on gravel" scores.

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  13. ...crawl of claws on gravel... wonderful sound words here.

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  14. My goodness this is such a captivating write, Bjorn!❤️

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