Thursday, September 24, 2015

Jisei - a crocus

always uphill -
pilgrim's broken cart
lies discarded
but in meadow grass
a blooming crocus

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21 comments:

  1. Oh this is really wonderful!!!!! I love it.

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  2. This has got to be one of my favorites so far, Bjorn--among so many wonderful poems today.

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  3. I love the end- crocus always mean hope to me

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  4. I too love the lovely ending: a blooming crocus ~

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  5. One of my favorites too, Bjorn...that blooming crocus stole the show!

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  6. Nicely done Bjorn.. would be good if we are remembered that way after death.. with the soft beauty and fragrance of flowers.

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  7. Life goes on and renews itself - this really really captures the essence of Zen to me! Very nice indeed!

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  8. Beautiful tanka ... it transmits serenity. Bastet

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  9. The journey can be so hard but there, at the end, that spurt of light and beauty. It makes it all worthwhile. Excellent tanka and so very Zen...traditional....just really like this.

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  10. hope at the end of a life - perfect

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  11. Oh, this is so beautiful! (A tanka with a haiku feel!)

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  12. love the imagery of the uphill struggle with the punctuation of that tender blossom to bring beauty!

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  13. what a find - we get them early over here

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  14. Guess uphill depends on where you're standing.

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  15. The blooming crocus is one of those details I really appreciate in works of literature. It acts as a nod to the reader. Please, come closer, this poem is for you. :-)

    Greetings from London.

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  16. Beautiful jisei...a feel of serenity and freedom with wildflowers.

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  17. Elegantly woven piece with pleasant surprise.

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  18. Beautiful and realistic images of struggle and hope.

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