Tuesday, October 20, 2015

Hallow's eve

The weight of darkness, waiting for the stars to fall, smells of soil. Old oak-trees, skeletal, brush against my sweaty face; their twigs are claws; laced with hunger. An owl hoots with desperation of an empty kiln. Suddenly awake, the bats leave the belfry, their eyes a-glow. Silence between my heartbeats diminishes as fog from rotting bogs, but still I hear his footsteps, confidently striding, crushing gravel.
shooting stars
dissipate my fantasy —
hallow’s eve

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Haibun linked to Carpe Diem (shooting stars) and dVerse Poetics where Toni wants us to write poetry on Halloween.
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29 comments:

  1. tonispencerOctober 20, 2015 9:54 PM

    Great! Those hungry skeletal branches are truly scary. That follower in the dark - shivers!

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    1. brudbergOctober 20, 2015 10:01 PM

      Thanks for the shooting stars that bring some order back.

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  2. MarkOctober 20, 2015 10:22 PM

    Well, you gave me shivers!

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  3. BodhiroseOctober 20, 2015 10:29 PM

    I like how those falling stars brought us out of our spooky thoughts about what may be lurking and scurrying about...

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    1. brudbergOctober 20, 2015 10:34 PM

      Ah.. but finally i was saved by them... phew

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  4. GraceOctober 21, 2015 1:21 AM

    Love the weight of darkness, scents and smells of coming hallow's eve ~ Amazing haibun Bjorn ~

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    1. brudbergOctober 21, 2015 9:14 AM

      Thank you.. I enjoyed writing the prose especially.

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  5. Sanaa RizviOctober 21, 2015 1:27 AM

    Sparkling verse! :D

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  6. MaryOctober 21, 2015 1:44 AM

    Oh, I really like "An owl hoots with desperation of an empty kiln." Really an excellent metaphor. Those footsteps...oh those footsteps....don't want to turn around and look!

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  7. AnonymousOctober 21, 2015 5:26 AM

    quite a spooky scene (shiver)

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  8. MiskyOctober 21, 2015 1:58 PM

    Spooky as heck, but all those jelly beans calmed by nerves. Delicious poem.

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  9. Reading PleasureOctober 21, 2015 2:03 PM

    This sent shivers down my spine. Beautifully written, though.

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  10. brudbergOctober 21, 2015 3:30 PM

    :-)

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  11. Victoria Ceretto-SlottoOctober 21, 2015 7:54 PM

    I hadn't read this when I wrote mine but I'm not surprised to see we had some of the same images and ideas. I think everyone is enjoying this prompt.

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    1. brudbergOctober 21, 2015 9:19 PM

      I didn't want to say it, but the similarities was striking... :-)

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  12. Victoria Ceretto-SlottoOctober 21, 2015 7:55 PM

    I hadn't read this when I wrote mine but I'm not surprised to see we had some of the same images and ideas. I think everyone is enjoying this prompt.

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  13. ChèvrefeuilleOctober 23, 2015 6:53 PM

    Awesome haibun Björn a real beauty and horrifying great feeling of Halloween.

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  14. UnknownOctober 24, 2015 8:06 AM

    You definately caught the spirit of Halloween that's for sure! Great haibun! Bastet

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  15. Theresa MilsteinOctober 25, 2015 10:55 PM

    Such a Hallows Eve mood here. I like that you've got sound and touch along with the visual. Branch claws are my favorite!

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  16. MerlinOctober 28, 2015 7:49 PM

    If I wanted a definition of what all Hallow's Eve was like, or even the scene of fall, this is exactly what I would be expecting. Thanks for sharing this with us all.

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  17. OutlawyerOctober 31, 2015 10:09 PM

    Ha! There is something very menacing about shooting stars here. K.

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  18. annell4November 01, 2015 4:01 PM

    A little bit scary....

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  19. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryNovember 01, 2015 4:36 PM

    sound haiku.

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  20. UnknownMarch 01, 2016 11:12 AM

    Dark, onomatopoetic, resounds with every word, every step.

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